I should have probably made it a haibun. In any case, here is a contex: 1) the neighbor across the street must have had a plumbing problem as their was a plumber in his truck cutting a length of pipe. 2) the 17-year-old kid up the street was wandering aimlessly arguing with 2 or perhaps 3 girlfriends. He would click between the arguments, one two three.
Or a series of haiku? I like the idea of a chain of them--implying a narrative, but fragmentary. I like your phrasing in any case--
cutting off calls, one two three
Do you know Ashbery's poem 32 haiku? (although I really don't remember the number . . . ) Each haiku is written as a single line. He takes the idea of a haiku and adapts it freely. I bet you would like this poem.
Haiku really sucks for context.
ReplyDeleteI should have probably made it a haibun. In any case, here is a contex: 1) the neighbor across the street must have had a plumbing problem as their was a plumber in his truck cutting a length of pipe. 2) the 17-year-old kid up the street was wandering aimlessly arguing with 2 or perhaps 3 girlfriends. He would click between the arguments, one two three.
ReplyDeleteOr a series of haiku? I like the idea of a chain of them--implying a narrative, but fragmentary. I like your phrasing in any case--
ReplyDeletecutting off calls, one two three
Do you know Ashbery's poem 32 haiku? (although I really don't remember the number . . . ) Each haiku is written as a single line. He takes the idea of a haiku and adapts it freely. I bet you would like this poem.
Okay, it's here
http://coursedocs.slcc.edu/engl/lbickmore/haiku%20lecture.htm
in a "lecture" I wrote for an early version of my online poetry writing course. It's near the end. It's 37 Haiku, from A Wave.
I like the series idea, lisa b.
ReplyDeleteI don't know Ashbery's work. Thank you for the link.